Nage's life story

Subject: Nage's life story Wed Sep 17, 2008 6:33 am

Name of your story:nage's life story
Does it change ur charecter in any way?:yes
Is it very short or epic size or in the Middle?:short or middle
Does it have any admins as charecters in it?:yes
does it have any people from this forum in it?:yes
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i dont sleep
i kill
the demon is here
my dreams is darken by the past of my clan
the dream of a ninja is to be the best

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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Mon Oct 06, 2008 10:21 pm

come on can someone say yes
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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Thu Oct 09, 2008 4:30 pm

approved
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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Thu Oct 09, 2008 9:12 pm

chapter 1:the big lie
when i was born my mother and father was killed by some ninjas and one of the ninjas stole me and said that he would take me far away to a river and kill me their and a man was walking by and saw me so he killed the ninja and he made me his son i grew up not knowing who i was but i was soon going to find out my dark past
i was a little kid i did not know what was a ninja until my father sent me to the academy l made no friends because i did not want any the first jutsu i learned was the shadow clone jutsu(kage bushin no jutsu) it was easy to master after class i went home my father said he was going to train me on my way a man in the dark grabbed me and said nage you are a part of the uchiha clan the rest of your history will come to you in time and then he disappeared i stood there for a minute and then i ran all the way home i told my father what happend and he said to me "son this is something you are not ready to know" we went to the forest for some training he said to me "fight my shadow clone" i destroyed his shadow clone in a short time after that i went to bed not knowing my past

chapter 2:the big bang
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i dont sleep
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the demon is here
my dreams is darken by the past of my clan
the dream of a ninja is to be the best

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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Sat Oct 11, 2008 12:57 am

Good start, try make it more descriptive.
The the shadow clonw? Razz

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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Sat Oct 11, 2008 7:56 pm

chapter 2:the big bang
the next day i woke up and went to the academy after that i came home then i heard a big bang i ran out side to see what it was then i saw some ninjas my father jumped in front of me and and beat up the ninjas he said "to get back inside" i ran inside and took out some wepons and gave him i took out some of them for my self and hid it .when he went away i ran outside and followed him to get some action too when he stopped 2 ninjas jumped in front of me i made a shadow clone and threw them in to the bushes and left them there i ran to the gate and saw him looking at me he told me i was in big trouble them some ninjas surrounded us we took them all out then my father looked in my eye and saw the sharingan he took me home and told me that he saw me when i was a little baby he saw a man going to kill me so i took you home and from that on you are my son and i saw the man in the shadow again.
the last part of my past was in the light but the first part was in the dark
next chapter 3:who is he!?!?!
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i dont sleep
i kill
the demon is here
my dreams is darken by the past of my clan
the dream of a ninja is to be the best

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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Mon Oct 13, 2008 7:28 am

Whos the man than...? I wanna KNOWW! Razz

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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Mon Oct 13, 2008 7:45 pm

chapter 3:who is he!?!?! part 1

the man in the dark face

after that day i went to my bed and i was thinking about the man so the next day i went to the forest to look for him i called him out and then he jumped out of the bushes i saw the uchiha sign on his shirt i said to him "who are you" he replied "i am your guardian" i went up more to him to see his face i had a flash back

flash back:it was when i was a baby i saw him and i remembered that he was my uncle

i ran to him and hugged him i told him to follow me when we came home my father and him were cursing they told my to go out side so i did so i ran around to the room they were in
my uncle:when are you going to tell him
my father:i don't know
mu uncle: you have to tell him
my uncle glanced the window
my uncle:he is looking
then they all walked out of the room
i ran back around and saw them my uncle said he had to go. my father took me into a room and said......

chapter 3:who is he!?!?! part 2
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i dont sleep
i kill
the demon is here
my dreams is darken by the past of my clan
the dream of a ninja is to be the best

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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Thu Oct 23, 2008 8:42 am

Subject: Re: Nage's life story Thu Oct 23, 2008 9:35 am

haha~ I like the way Nage, you added a picture.
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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Thu Oct 23, 2008 11:22 am

its a start...but it could be better. Try not to use "I" as much, use the characters name, when not using dialog. and once you do use I, make sure its uppercased and not lowercased.

Also, when some is speaking, use " at the start" and as the end of of dialog.

Subject: Re: Nage's life story Thu Oct 23, 2008 4:51 pm

agree.
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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Tue Oct 28, 2008 8:05 am

ok hmm I think I am going to do some thing. I am going to start over
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i dont sleep
i kill
the demon is here
my dreams is darken by the past of my clan
the dream of a ninja is to be the best

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Subject: Re: Nage's life story Tue Oct 28, 2008 9:26 am

chapter 1:the shattered past

the darkened path of my past is filled with hate,blood,rage and anger.when I was a little boy about 4 months old a group of people went out to kill my family.

Crash went a plate then the boss said "you idiot you let them hear us coming" my father took out his katana and went to the kitchen. one of the men they call rekizami jumped at my father with a katana my used the crescent moon dance and two men fell to the ground the boss was still standing then the boss said "your are strong you took the two of them out without a sweat but still your no match for me" then a blade cut off my father's head off then the boss said "a shadow clone"[b] my father stabbed him with his katana then my mom came out with her katana too then the both of them said [b]"spinning fire sword" my mom blew some fire on my dad's sword then my dad spun around and around and slashed the man then man fell to the ground then there was a laugh when the fire stopped they saw that it was a puppet the puppet got up and killed them the man who killed them looked around the house and he saw me he told one of his men to kill me he said I will take him to the river and kill him" when he was taking me to the river a man was walking and he saw the man throwing me into the river he jump and grab me and then he killed the man that was going to kill me.then he took me home as his new son

chapter 2:the way of a ninja
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i dont sleep
i kill
the demon is here
my dreams is darken by the past of my clan
the dream of a ninja is to be the best

Click here to feed me a fruit!
Get your own at Dinomon!