The holly land

Subject: The holly land Mon Jul 14, 2008 12:01 am

this is a story based in the times of the crusades, im just putting in characters so it seems more interesting. I beware you that my first part consists of a fight and it is some what gruesome.

Name of your story:The Holly Land
Does it change ur charecter in any way?:No
Is it very short or epic size or in the Middle?:I only have a short amount right now but ill be creating more as time passes
Does it have any admins as charecters in it?:maybe,if I put them in later in the story
does it have any people from this forum in it?:yes
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Subject: Re: The holly land Tue Jul 15, 2008 1:53 am

Sounds interesting ^_^! I cant wait to read your story line.
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Subject: Re: The holly land Tue Jul 15, 2008 3:11 am

~approved~

you may start typing your story Very Happy

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All the way.
Here to help you through your day.

Holding you up,
When you are weak,
Helping you find what it is you seek.

Catching your tears,
When you cry.
Pulling you through when the tide is high.

Just being there,
Through thick and thin,
All just to say, you are my friend.

Subject: Re: The holly land Tue Jul 15, 2008 3:23 pm

The Holy Land is lost
That single thought kept assaulting Mimotaku, its brutal finality more terrifying than the hordes of fighters swarming through the breach in the wall. He fought to block the thought, to push it away. Now is not the time to lament. He had work to do. Men to kill.
His broadsword held high, he charged through the clouds choking smoke and dust and plunged into the seething ranks of the enemy. They were everywhere, their scimitars and axes ripping into flesh, their warrior howls piercing the haunting, rhythmic beat of the kettle drummers outside the fortress walls.
With all his strength, he brought down his sword, splitting one man's skull clear to the eyes, his blade springing free as he lunged at his next opponent. Flicking a quick glance to his right, he spotted Kyotoshien driving his sword into the chest of another attacker before moving on yo his next opponent. Dazed by the wails of pain and the screams of rage around him, someone clutched Martins left hand and swiftly clubbed the offender with the pommel of his sword before bringing down its blade, feeling it cut through muscle and bone. From the corner of his eye, he sensed something menacingly close to his right and instinctively swung his sword at i, slicing through the upper arm of another on of the invaders before slashing open his cheek and severing his tongue in one blow.
It had been ours since he or any of his brothers had known any respite. The Muslims onslaught had not only been ceaseless; it had also been far worse than anticipated. Arrows and projectiles of blazing pitch had rained down incessantly
on the city for days,starting more fires than could be tackled at once, while the Sultan's men had dug holes beneath the great walls into which they had packed brushwood that was also set alight in several places, these makeshift furnaces had cracked the walls thats were now crumbling under a barrage of catapulted rocks. The Knights and the Hospitallers had managed, by sheer force of will. to repulse the assault on Saint Anthony's Gate before setting it on fire and retreating. The Accused Tower, however, had lived up its name, allowing the rampaging Saracens into the city and sealing its fate.
Gargling Shrieks of agony receded into confused uproar as Mimotaku yanked his sword back and looked around desperately for any sign of hope, but there was no dought in his mind. The Holy Land was indeed lost. With mounting dread, he realized that they would all be dead before the night was over. They were facing the largest army ever seen, and, despite the fury and the passion coursing, through his veins, his efforts and those of his brothers were surely doomed to failure.

This is only the First part, Its likely that this will be the longest part. Ill be introducing Karon and Inu later on in the story, and maybe more characters :].
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Subject: Re: The holly land Tue Jul 15, 2008 3:31 pm

am i int his
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Subject: Re: The holly land Tue Jul 15, 2008 3:51 pm

like I said at the bottom of the first part

"Ill be introducing Karon and Inu later on in the story, and maybe more characters :]"

so yes, you'll be in it
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Subject: Re: The holly land Wed Jul 16, 2008 12:16 am

Oh its awesome story so far taku.
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Subject: Re: The holly land Wed Jul 16, 2008 6:20 am

the second part will have very little talking it in, and i might not do another battle scene, but we'll see what I come up with in the future.
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Subject: Re: The holly land Wed Jul 16, 2008 10:09 am

It wasn’t long before his superiors realized it too. Mimotaku’s heart sank as he heard the fateful horn calling on the surviving Knights to abandon the city’s defences. His eyes, darting left and right in a confused frenzy, again he found his comrades Kyotosien and Inu. He saw them in the same agony, the same shame that was burning through him. Side by side, they fought their way through the scrambling mob and managed to make their way back to the way relative safety of the knight compound.
Mimotaku and his friends followed the older knights as they stormed through the throngs of terrified citizens who had taken refuge behind the Bourg’s massive walls. The sight that greeted them in the great hall shocked the group even more than the carnage they had witnessed outside. Lying on a rough refectory table was Eki, the grand master of all the nights. Bao, the marshal, stood at his side, along with two monks. The woeful looks on their faces left little room for doubt. As the three knights reached his side, Eki’s eyes open and he raised his head slightly, the move meant causing an involuntary groan of pain. Mimotaku stared at him in stunned disbelieve. The old mans skin drained of color, his eyes bloodshot. Mimotaku’s eyes reached down Eki’s body, struggling to make scene of the sight, and he stopped at the feathered bolt sticking out of the side of his rib cage. The grand master held its shaft in the curve of his hand. With his other he beckoned Inu, who approached him, knelt by his side, and cupped his hand with both of her own. “It is time”, the old man managed, his voice pained and weak, but clear. “Go now, and may God be with you”.
The words drifted past mimotaku’s ears. His attention was elsewhere, focused on something he’d noticed as soon as Eki had opened his mouth. It was his tongue, which had turned black. Rage and hate swelled as Mimotaku recognized the effect of the poisoned bolt. This leader of Men, who has dominated the aspects of the young knights life for as long as he remembered, as good as dead. He noticed Eki lifting his gaze to survey nodding almost imperceptibly. The marshal moved to the foot of the table and lifted a velvet cover to reveal a small, ornate chest. It was not more than three hands wide. Mimotaku had never seen it before. He watched din raped silence as Inu raised to her feet and gazed solemnly at the chest, then looked back at Eki. The old man held his gaze before closing his eyes again, his breathing taking an ominous rasp. Inu went up to bao and hugged him, then lifted the small chest and without so much as a backward glance, headed out. As she passed mimotaku and kyotoshien, she simply said, “Come”.
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Subject: Re: The holly land Wed Jul 16, 2008 11:10 am

hey, can i be in ur story? were in the some clan.
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Subject: Re: The holly land Wed Jul 16, 2008 12:47 pm

Sure i have a place for you
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Subject: Re: The holly land Wed Jul 16, 2008 1:08 pm

you will be in my story.
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Subject: Re: The holly land Wed Jul 16, 2008 6:23 pm

i still wont to be in the storie mimotaku
lol
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Subject: Re: The holly land Wed Jul 16, 2008 9:14 pm

have patience Karon, you'll have a great part (sorry but it'l begin in part five >,<)
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Subject: Re: The holly land Thu Jul 17, 2008 12:06 am

i like my part so taku. thank you for putting me in your story. ^_^
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