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Hyu-zu Yoshi Eki's Apprentice


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 | Subject: towashin good or evil Sat Jun 14, 2008 8:44 pm | |
| Name of your story:towashin the light darkness Does it change ur charecter in any way?:yes his personality Is it very short or epic size or in the Middle?:epic size Does it have any admins as charecters in it?:yes does it have any people from this forum in it?:well it has people through out the sight in it |
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Hyu-zu Bao Super Mod


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sat Jun 14, 2008 8:51 pm | |
| ~approved~ you may now start typing the story. _________________
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Catching your tears, When you cry. Pulling you through when the tide is high.
Just being there, Through thick and thin, All just to say, you are my friend. Friends Forever |
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Hyu-zu Yoshi Eki's Apprentice


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sat Jun 14, 2008 10:00 pm | |
| TOWASHIN THE LIGHT DARKNESS
the village of konoha in its early states when everything was peaceful and beatiful and all the villages and clans were one
"Okay class have you all studied for that important test"
everyone but towashin raised there hand
"towashin" konosha maria said "why haven't you studied"
towashin gives maria a cold stare and looks the other way
"hm towashin is there something troubling you", "you know you can tell me anything"konosha maria said
towashin takes a deep breath with tears rolling down his face
"well last night when i was doing my home work and studying my brothers tore the study text book you gave me for the test today"
"well i am sure it was an accident"maria said
towashin started to get mad and yelled
"NO!!!!!!!!!!!!"
"IT WASN'T AN ACCIDENT THEY DID IT ON PURPOSE"
"well did your mom do anything about it"
"she didn't all she did was stare and laugh as my brothers tore my text book apart"
towashin had more and more tears run down his face
"konosha maria"towashin said in a shattery voice
"yes towashin"
"have you ever been hated this much"
konosha maria stares at towashin not knowing what to say so what she did was say "your mom doesn't hate you"
as she tries to pat towashin on his back he slaps here hand away and the bell rings
towashin grabs his things and then goes training with his sensei marth and his friends/teammates kentaarza and neji ironfist hyuuga they all train there best but towashin seems to have a low self esteem when he trains
marth tries to help him but towashin feels as if his mom will like him if he was dead
it is night and towashin's mom doesn't care if he is late or injured when he comes home and sometimes when towashin does come home late the dinner is gone and towashin has to eat out the garbage
towashin sleeps on the floor and the next mornning when he woke up he went out side and saw karon they went for a 4 hour walk and they were talking
"towashin so how have you been" karon said
towashin says with out hesitating"miserable"
karon looks puzzled"why"
towashin doesn't awnser the question but the karon says
"i know what will cheer you up you and me tonight have dinner my treat" towashin says "yes"
so when towashin returns home he sees bloody foot prints on the ground he goes to all the houses and sees blood splattered on the walls towashin runs to his house and sees his mom and brothers on the floor dead towashin runs and sees someone in the fog towashin said "who are you" "why did you do this" when the person turns around towashin sees a familiar face in the mist it was sasuke he had came for revenge on konoha so when towashin runs at sasuke, sasuke gets his sword out and stabs towashin through his stomach and out his back sasuke then leaves the dead body of towashin to stay there
"karon is at the ramen shop wondering were towashin is"
as she walks to towashin house she sees the dead bodies of towashin and his whole family
karon screams and after that she never heard from towashin again
after towashin's death everyone who knew him cryed
on towashins grave it said
here lays towashin kishimoto a kind and nobale boy who nobaleness spread through out all of the villages and clans 1992-2002
10 yrs later it is the year 2012 and a really evil atasuke leader KaiRai Eki sees towashins records of abilities towashin didn't know he has and abilities towashin would have never used so Eki uses the forbidden jutsu Reanimation bringing towashin back to life causing him to be immortal and seeking revenge and has alot of hatred towashin is more powerful then he was back then
"towashin kishimoto i am KaiRai Eki leader of the atasuke who as brought you back to life and now you are now my apprentice of the atasuke you now have free privilidges of anything you have free will"
Towashin feels enormous amounts of chakra flowing through his body thanks to eki now towashin is indistructable
"Together we are undefeatable hahahahahahahahahahahahaha"eki says
"so what is our first objective eki sir"
"lets pay alittle visit to the land of konoha"
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Hyu-zu Yoshi Eki's Apprentice


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sat Jun 14, 2008 11:24 pm | |
| so what do you think _________________
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Retsu Kenty Admin/Hazi's Homeboy/Retsu 2nd in Command


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 7:38 am | |
| a few spelling errors but cool story 
thanks for putting me in it hehe  _________________ The official post/quote of the week™
| ShinChan wrote: | Yeah good luck man ^^ I like this girl in my martial arts class who is taller than me..I sniffed her...she smelled like tea 
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Hyu-zu Yoshi Eki's Apprentice


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 8:03 am | |
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TOWASHIN'S
TRANSFORMATION
"hm so eki were did you say we were going to"
eki chuckled
"We are going to konoha to pay them a visit"
towashin looks down when he sees a flash back of his best friend in konoha Hazi they were the best of friends
"whats on your mind towashin"
towashin says"nothing"
*crackle,crackle stomp ,crush*
eki and towashin heard a noise in the bush's,trees and rocks
"looks like we have some compony"eki said
towashin was not in the mood to be ambushed so who ever it was, was going to be in alot of trouble
"hey whats up eki long time no see"it was yume a member of the atasuke"what do we have here"yume looks at towashin
"this is towashin kishimoto"
"you mean the one you got killed by sasuke uchiha who joined irochimaru"
"yeah"
towashin glares at them both and says"lets get moving"
when they finally reach konoha everyone stares at towashin with excitement
"HEY EVERYONE TOWASHIN'S ALIVE AND LOOK HOW MUCH HE HAS GROWN"
Karon comes through out the crowd while yume and eki are hidden watching what he will do
"come on towashin you won't believe you is hokage now"
towashin looks at here with a droopy cold stare and says"who"
"hazi" karon said
towashin's eyes get wider
"so come on towashin let me show you"
"...no"
"what do you mean"
"look at me i do not belong here can't you see look at me i am immortal i am going to destroy your precious village karon"
karon looks at towashin with tears running down here face
"why towashin why"
"the old days are over now i am not coming back" so that was yume's and eki's que the came out attacking everything and set it on fire towashin ran leaving karon
while towashin is running he hears a voice
"lomg time no see towashin"
towashin turns around with a glare on his face
"hazi look at you it is so ashame you will have to die though"
towashin and hazi both jump on the air towashin gets a sword out that eki gave him and now towashin can produce massive amounts of rasenchi in his sword and towashins body is rasenchi
"come give me your best shot"towashin said
as hazi ran to towashin he used a wind fire and water elemental jutsu on him but towashin jumped and appeared behind him towashin kicks hazi in the air
then towashin watches hazi fall down slowly and bam towashin punches hazi in the stomach blasting him 70 feet away
"to slow then hazi, kent, joel, neji, marth, darkness, and karon allow surround towashin jumping on him but the towashin uses a jutsu he never used before that he said was to dangerous he used the body of rasenchi's specialty
"RASENCHI NAGISHI"
and now he blast and electricuited everyone and after that towashin yume and eki all vanish returning to the atasuke hidden base
"towashin now do you see what you are capable of"
towashin says "yes and i need more power hahahahah" _________________
 I HAVE A LONG NAME zachary evan minalsilo eucudar delerosa sina derpree |
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Hyu-zu Yoshi Eki's Apprentice


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 8:14 am | |
| so i like this part more than the other _________________________________
 towashin _________________
 I HAVE A LONG NAME zachary evan minalsilo eucudar delerosa sina derpree |
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Retsu Kenty Admin/Hazi's Homeboy/Retsu 2nd in Command


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 9:24 am | |
| alot more action.
alot of godmodding heh :]
and btw its 'Akatsuki'
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| ShinChan wrote: | Yeah good luck man ^^ I like this girl in my martial arts class who is taller than me..I sniffed her...she smelled like tea 
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Hyu-zu Yoshi Eki's Apprentice


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 9:32 am | |
| no i have naruto books and they said it is atasuke _________________
 I HAVE A LONG NAME zachary evan minalsilo eucudar delerosa sina derpree |
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Retsu Kenty Admin/Hazi's Homeboy/Retsu 2nd in Command


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 9:35 am | |
| o_O
well everywhere ive read its akatsuki
heh
owell nvm then  _________________ The official post/quote of the week™
| ShinChan wrote: | Yeah good luck man ^^ I like this girl in my martial arts class who is taller than me..I sniffed her...she smelled like tea 
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Hyu-zu Yoshi Eki's Apprentice


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 9:38 am | |
| so what do you want to do _________________
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Uchiha Satsu SpamNobi


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 11:40 am | |
| first: That's my pic! Sec: You're forgiven Thid: I want to appear more times  |
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Retsu Hazirami Head Admin/Shodaime Hokage/Eki's Right-hand Man


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 12:06 pm | |
| Its technically Akatsuki, tsuki means moon or clouds, aka means red. red clouds or red moons is what it is meant to translate to, akatsuke, aka means red, tsuke isn't a word. _________________ Everyone that needs character updated, battle referee, or any other kind of help, pm me, I'm not a mind reader.
May you Rest in Peace Aunt Toni, your family and friends will always love you.
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Hyu-zu Yoshi Eki's Apprentice


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 | Subject: Re: towashin good or evil Sun Jun 15, 2008 12:09 pm | |
| okay we are finished with that so what do you think of the story _________________
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